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Introduction & Thesis statement
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-a good country is a country that has good human
resources
-health is the benchmark of a country having good
people's welfare. and the government must do it to make this happen
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Argument 1 :tax for health sector
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-Use the tax money in the health sector make quality of a
country health infrastructure increase
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Argument 2: health for economy
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-public and people health makes the country's economy
increase
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Argument 3:health people for develop the country
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-Having good and healthy human resources can help develop
the country.
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-Counter Argument 1 for argument 1,2,3
-Counter argument 2 for counter argument 1
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-people's lack of knowledge about maintaining health
makes the country lose a lot
money to pay for a lot of health insurance.
-improve education to the public about the ways and
importance of maintaining our health.
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-conclusion
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-health is important for someone and a country but it is
better to maintain health than cure
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Should Goverment fund free for health care use the taxesor should citizens pay private insurance?
Society health is important for creating good quality of human resources, decreasing the number of poverty and building a country's economy. Having healthy citizens is one of the country's development indices in addition to education and income.So with this makes me agree that the use of tax money in the health sector is a good thing because a country to continue to develop their country must have good and healthy human resources.Where the tax money comes from the people and the use of tax money will help the people. Health is the benchmark of a country having good people's welfare. and the government must do it to make this happen
Before the existence of health support by the government such as BPJS and JKN, Very few hospitals in Indonesia have good facilities and if someone does not have a lot of money it is not possible to use a hospital with good facilities because the cost is very high.After the government help to build health in Indonesia. This made health infrastructure in Indonesia increase with the number of hospitals with international standards in Indonesia increase and also many private hospitals that participated in the BPJS and JKN program and make everyone in indonesia can use good hospital quality and fasility .According to data from BPJS, private hospitals that collaborate with BPJS in 2018 have reached 2,200 hospitals or around 65% of all Indonesia."We strongly believe that this JKN program can solve health care problems in Indonesia, and open wide access for people to get better health services. Long before the JKN program was implemented, we also conveyed this to doctors and all components in the hospital, so on day H it can provide the best service to BPJS Health patients, "said Director of Pelni Hospital, Dr. dr. Fathema Djan Rachmat, Sp.B, Sp.BTKV (K)
In order for the economy in a country to remain stable and running, healthy human resources are needed. Because a country is not far from the role of the community to help the country's growth. The economy in Indonesia is driven by community consumption, investment and exports. is a supporting indicator that encourages economic growth, while the most basic or basic factor indicator of economic growth is education and health. Education and health are two things that must be the government's priority because they are related to the quality of Human Resources."If a country does not have education, it will become the latest country. As with health, if the community is sick, the country will not be able to grow" Said James Riady CEO of Lippo Group and Deputy Chairperson of Education and Health Midwives.
For example, according to data from the CIA World Factbook in 2011, the country with the highest life expectancy was Monaco, which is 89 years old and a country with a low life expectancy is somalia at the age of 50. Then Indonesia is at a pretty good level at the age of 70 . This data proves that a country with a good economy will have a good life expectancy.you can check here.
Health is a major and valuable investment with long-lasting benefits. By having a high level of health, a country can have good quality human resources and have good human resources they can help their country to develop economic and infrastructure development."Without health we will not be able to become a strong country. With good health we can build with education. From education that gives birth to a smart nation so we will get a good economy and be able to innovate. In the end we can prosper and become a good and strong country to face challenges outside, "said Menkes Prof. Dr. dr. Nila F. Moeloek, Sp.M. According to the results of research conducted by a non-profit organization social progress imperative. Scandinavian countries get high scores in the "Social Progress Index," based on basic human needs, health, education and personal rights. These are 3 countries with the highest social progress index scores, namely finkandia by getting a score of 90 then Canada 89.5 and Denmark with a score of 89.4 or you can check here.
But with the freeing of health care by using taxes from the government, this has caused a defisit money loss of 10 T in Rupiah,According to data from the expenditure of BPJS funds in 2014 the country lost 5.7 T, in 2016 lost 9.7 T then in 2017 reached 10 T this happened because of the many residents who used it and also happened missmatch between BPJS and financing claims.This proves that there is a lack of citizen knowledge about the importance of maintaining self-health,check here.And to solve this problem the government must educate how to maintain health to the citizen through all platforms such as print media, television or online media.
health is the basic of a country to have good human resources and can develop its country. The role of government is very important to help citizens to get good facilities and quality for their health. But knowledge is importance for maintaining health in citizens because it can reduce use of insurance fund. last word for me "health is important for someone and a country but it is better to maintain health than cure"
In the last paragraph, you forget to make the first word which is "health is the basic of country" to be Capital. It suppose to be "Health...." with capital H
BalasHapusthank for your correction
HapusAlready well written. I can't find any other mistake
BalasHapusthank you my friend for read my essay
Hapusits a great essay dude. i see no mistakes
BalasHapusIn the last sentence of the last, do you mean 'last word from me'?
BalasHapusHem. It's nice essay Ghalib, but you sould re-check some grammer sentences.
BalasHapusin the first paragraph, don't forget to add '.' at the end of the paragraph.
BalasHapusNice essay☃️
BalasHapusFrom mee, i can't fine any mistake and its already more than 300 word,its great
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BalasHapusgreat essay ghalib i got the explanation clearly, put link in the essay is great idea good joob
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