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-Introduction
-Thesis Statement
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- This part will explain about the background of this phenomenon
- Plastic waste in the ocean is not very good for life in the sea
because plastic waste can be consumed by animals in the sea which cause
health problems and plastic waste can damage the marine environment because
which is difficult to decompose
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-Problem
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-Plastic is dangerous and can injure for ocean animals
-Plastic
is dangerous and can damaging plants in the ocean environment
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-Solution
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-Limitation and replacement of plastic raw materials
-Filtering waste before entering the ocean
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- Conlusion
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-We must be smart in using and managing plastic use
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Plastic is the basic ingredient in making an item that is widely used . The use of plastic materials for the raw material for making an item results in high waste of plastic produced and some of the waste is not managed properly and then in the ocean. Plastic waste in the ocean very dangerous for the environment and the ecosystem in the sea because plastic has a difficult nature to decompose. Waste in the ocean is not very good for life in the sea because plastic waste can be consumed by animals in the sea which cause health problems and plastic waste can damage the marine environment because which is difficult to decompose
plastic waste in the ocean is very diverse, there are those that have a large size with hard textures and some are small in size with soft textures. This is dangerous because many animals are caught and difficult to escape as examples of many sea turtles and seals caught in trash. finally they are injured or disabled because they are difficult to break away. Then plastic waste can also damage plants and the environment in the sea. Because of the nature of plastics that are difficult to decompose, a lot of plastic waste is stuck on plant parts such as mangroves and coral reefs which make plants difficult to breathe and photosynthesis makes the marine ecosystem worse.
Currently there is no way that can eliminate 100% of the use and impact of plastic, but there is still a way to reduce it. First we can reduce and replace the use of plastic base materials such as carrying our own bags when shopping to reduce plastic waste. filtering devices on river and sea borders with the use of these filters can reduce waste including plastic waste that will go to the ocean. The last, by reusing plastic waste into a tool that can be used or art craft and it can be sold that give us money.
Plastic is the basic material for making a device that is difficult to decompose, therefore we must be able to manage this material so that it can be used again when it becomes garbage and also we must reduce the use of plastic in our daily lives such as carrying our own shopping bags while shopping. As human beings, it is our duty to maintain the environment and animals in order to remain in good condition.
It's nice Ghalib. But I think you sould add (.) the end of 1st paragraph, and start with capital letter for the 2nd paragraph. Hehe
BalasHapusYour essay contains complete information. Good Job
BalasHapusNice conclusion
BalasHapusgood essay ghalib
BalasHapusI think better use materials than ingredient in paragraph 1
BalasHapusits will better if the conclusion use "to conclude, or to sum it up …"
BalasHapusNice essay
BalasHapusMmmmm your essay is really good and I don't seem to find any mistake whatsoever. But, perhaps you could justt add a bit of improvement by adding more academic words. For example in your 2nd paragraph, 'Finally they are injured....', you could change it into a more formal form like 'This leads to the injury and disability of the sea creatures because they could hardly escape the plastic'.
BalasHapusnice essay, keep it up
BalasHapusGood essay, keep it up
BalasHapusNice essay and nice solution
BalasHapusnice essay , the correction has already told by Jo
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